Against The Wind Rough Cut

This is the rough cut of my music video which I will show to members of my target audience and ask for their feedback - either written or verbal recoded on camera. I think the main issue with the rough cut is that there is some shakey camera work and most of the shots need to be cut down to quicken the pace of the video, however I have plenty of time to make the neccessary improvements to ensure it appeals to my target audience.